I’m writing a revenge story. This guy or girl comes from a rich family. Their dad is a doctor and their mom is a lawyer. The kid is in their 20s and is a drug addict. Their family cut them off because of it.
The dealer kills them because they couldn’t pay the money they owed. Then a loved one goes after the dealer for revenge.
Is this good? I didn’t want to overcomplicate it by giving it a huge conspiracy, but at the same time, realistically, couldn’t they have gotten the money some other way?
This story makes no sense. Why would a dealer front merchandise? The only time that ever happens in real life is if the dealer is male, the buyer is female, and they find the dealer finds them attractive. But that’s rare because both dealers and customers are usually male.
Also, which drugs?
Lastly, it’s extremely unlikely that a low-level dealer is going to seek “revenge” on a customer. They’re usually not gang members; just regular everyday people like you and me who are desperate to make some extra cash. If a customer screws you, you cut your losses and refuse to sell to them anymore. After all, you’re running an illegal business. Laying low is going to be your #1 priority; last thing you’re going to do is get the police’s attention with a revenge plot.
You need to spend more time in the real world before you write a story about things that happen out there.
I think you’re lacking the depth of experience to be much of an author yet and should focus on living for a while. Try heroin, take another crack at the novel while you’re getting clean
Lol. Don’t suggest heroin tho!
I admittedly thought something similar when I saw this post (not to suggest heroin tho!). I thought, “write what you know!” I’m all for ppl learning to write better, but in a world/economy of hyper-fictionalized junk, I would like yo see more stories about people’s actual experiences and less like unconnected fiction. To me, miscellaneous fiction is like cotton candy – it tastes sweet, but it’s empty.
PS - stay away from opiates. Addiction is a supreme waste of time.
The only thing that I think is unrealistic about this is drugs are rarely sold on credit. The most common way people get into life-threatening debt is underground gambling
EDIT: A certain type of rich person falls into the trap of cocaine plus alcohol benders. Combine that with a gambling habit and you have a very quick way to ruin a life
I would suggest: they got push to the edge by the whole situation and off themselves. The loved one then take the dealer as a responsable.
Have you ever watched the news? We have many highly publicized examples of rich people being addicted to drugs.
For fiction, I like the approach they took on the tv show House. Maybe not rich but certainly privileged enough to get away with an addiction that would have ruined anyone else’s life.
But maybe a good approach to your story is to imagine an unusual dealer:: a wealthy person is not visiting the neighborhood crack house. For example Michael Jackson’s addiction was fed by an actual doctor authorized to write prescriptions so his drugs were “legal”
so much for “do no harm”. that “doctor” should have their licence taken away
Rich people absolutely get addicted to drugs. They just have sufficient resources that it doesn’t affect their lives as detrimentally in many cases. Elon is up to his eyeballs in ketamine on a given day.
Look at RFK. Shipped off to private schools and spent plenty of that time getting kicked out and transferred to other private schools because he was a dick and on drugs.
Elon Musk uses so much ketamine he ruined his bladder. He’s also a nazi pedophile, but that isn’t related
Bro narcotics are probably the most reliable thing that kills rich people
Elon Musk is still alive tho
Define “alive”. Seems like his brain was replaced with whatever the fuck Grok is.
While we all wish he would die early, unfortuntely we don’t actually know how heavy his usage is. We hype any percieved ailment to the moon like Trump’s usually non-lethal skin cancer. Hard to catch something late when these bastards have doctors on retainer.
Yeah his drugs of choice are of the “talked to Sauron and tweak out on the internet” schedule that you have to take a lot of to get any organ damage. But maybe we’ll get lucky and somebody will lace his shit one day.
Take a look at the Reiner story. Being rich and famous doesn’t stop drugs from ruining families.
Rich people do get addicted to drugs.
The unrealistic part is the fanily being killed because they can’t pay.
Why can’t they pay? I thought they were rich? And a drug dealer isnt going to kill the only people who could conceivably pay him.
A more believable story might be blackmail/extortion. Why kill the source of income?
I’m assuming they can’t pay because the family cut them off. OP will need to come up with an explanation for the family refusing to help. Just being an addict would not be enough in a normal functional family, but it would depend on the protagonists past (mis)behaviour or maybe the family is very much against drugs for religious reasons.
OP is suggesting the rich family can’t pay. So unless its a typo it doesn’t really make a lot of sense.
Rich family WON’T pay is more realistic imo
OP is using they/them to refer to the junkie. I see what you mean, but I’m not sure it’s the family that will get killed or just the junkie.
Ahhh. Now I’m rereading it, that kind of makes sense.
The thing about rich people is, that Ehen you have the money to buy all the drugs you want, you can do quite a lot of them until it starts to affect you financially.
Just think about how much cocaine rich people like to snort.
Killing your junkies don’t make sense. Even with small dealers they know how much they can ‘lend out’ to their clients. After the client gets to the point they get cut off. But they will have 20$ next time. You will give them 10$ material and keep the other 10 for their loan.
How they got the money, you don’t ask. Customer service even in drug business is the key to long term success.
And sometimes people who went to jail come back months later, because they hit big and they can afford to pay back that 16$ that you never thought you will see again… and then spend more money that you didn’t think they had.Dealer shouldn’t plan to kill them, just threaten them, then accidentally kill them in a scuffle
Never kill someone who owes you money - that’s terrible business. Kill for revenge or to send a message…
Probably makes more sense to kill their dog or something like that. Hint that there’s more where that came from.
Yeah, the message is “pay this guy or he’ll kill you”. How is that not clear?
They have another name for criminals that lend you money and just ask you pay it back over time with some interest tacked on. They’re called banks.
